Your Haiku follows poetic form; please consider the double "and" usage in the second line; Then, I think you once can state God's name or use the word "You" in your Haiku to show clearly that your Haiku is about God's relationship :-) I wish all the best for your study. -thanks-
Your Haiku follows poetic form; please consider the double "and" usage in the second line; Then, I think you once can state God's name or use the word "You" in your Haiku to show clearly that your Haiku is about God's relationship :-)
ReplyDeleteI wish all the best for your study.
-thanks-
Thanks a lot, Sir ;)
ReplyDeleteI've made the word "Your" better than before you comment this poem. Then, i'll be more creative to make the other works ehehehe
that is very meaningful mutiara :) you did a great job
ReplyDeletealways remember to pray every time